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CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« on: 2016-04-19 14:48:11 »
So, as many of you may know, I'm not only a fan of anime, but also a pretty big sakuga nerd. Sakuga is just the Japanese word for animation, but it has come to describe a particular type of fandom for high-budget single cuts and, to me at least, a fascination with the animation industry as a whole. It is this interest that has driven me to study Japanese, so that I can one day work at an animation studio myself.

But enough about me. As president, one of the things I most want for CAINE to do is to create its own piece of animation as a club. I believe that this is not only technically feasible, but something we would be well-suited to. Now, that comes with some caveats, of course: this would be a short piece—two to five minutes in length at most. It will also be limited by the types of shots that are feasible for us to create. So, no huge action sequences, crowd scenes, etc. I'll come back to this in a minute.

The purpose of this thread is to get your proposals for a two-to-five-minute short story that you'd like to see animated. Again, please consider the restrictions inherent in this kind of independent production, but don't let yourself be overly-restricted by them. I'm happy to provide specific advice in this regard, so don't hesitate to ask how feasible a particular scene would be, because often there's a budget-friendly work around. After we narrow down the proposals to a reasonable number that everyone is happy with, I will help you convert them into a proper screenplay, and at the beginning of the fall semester, we will put it to a vote which we're going to animate.

The deadline for proposals is August 21st at midnight. Good luck! I can't wait to see what you come up with.

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Re: CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« Reply #1 on: 2016-05-09 18:24:04 »
So, I realize that you might not have a good idea of where to start on something like this, so I went ahead and wrote my own as an example. I'll also try to break down what works and what doesn't with this example so that you don't make some of the same mistakes writing yours. I've read over 50 hard sci-fi novels in the past year, so I'm just going to write what I know. I encourage you to do the same, as I believe that generally leads to higher-quality work.

Summary:
   A naval training exercise in the Jovian System goes pear shaped as a rogue element attempts to kill the commander and crew of one of the Colonial Fleet vessel Apalonia. The story is centered on electronic-warfare specialist Gabriela Torres, who was recently transferred to the ship from the C.F. Galahad due to discrimination based on her heritage. Gabriela was born in one of Earth’s welfare cities now under occupation by the Colonial Fleet. The Apalonia, under acting captain Scott Young, has become a harbor for such misfits at the Ganymede Naval Academy.
   The story starts during the training exercise: the Apalonia appears to be winning, but a troubling pattern of anomalies starts to become apparent in the tactical data. From these, Gabriela is able to anticipate the incoming stealthed kinetic missile—launched from outside the engagement zone at high velocity in violation of the rules of safe combat for training exercises—and is able to bring counter-measures to bear on it at the last minute, resulting in a graze rather than a direct hit. This nevertheless causes severe damage to the Apolonia and several of her personal sustain injuries.
   A series of scenes follows at the opposing team’s court-martial, in which Gabriela and Commander Young testify against the men commanding the Galahad based on her analysis of the tactical data. Despite pleading innocent, the men are sentenced to death for treason. This is followed by a secretive conversation between Gabriela and Scott that is layered over a series of flashbacks that parallel the main story, but reveals the true sequence of events that lead up to the training incident. Specialist Torres herself reprogramed one of the Galahad’s training missiles before being reassigned—setting up the enemy commander to take the fall for the botched assassination attempt. She and Commander Young affirm their goal of ridding the armed forces of colonial influence and one day freeing Earth from their oppression.

Critique:
The first obvious problem with this proposal is its length. Although I attempted to curb this by starting things in medias res and concluding with a montage, I think it would be almost impossible to squeeze down into a five-minute runtime without serious compromises to the story. I did consider this, however, and I believe that the final montage could use a series of static frames should be budget require stretching over a slightly longer runtime. I encourage all of you to consider that sort of production compromise when making your proposals, as they could go a long way towards selling your idea as something practical. Nevertheless, communicating the backstory of the characters and conflict between Earth and the Colonies may prove too difficult in such a short span.

Other challenges are, of course, the use of a sci-fi setting, which involves particular animation challenges (animating bodies in zero-G can be very difficult). Like all things, however, these can be overcome by cost-cutting measures such as having characters "float" more than move, and limiting the number of shots of the ship's exterior. However, the missile impact and subsequent damage will require substantial animation challenges that may prove insurmountable.

So, I hope that gives you all some more ideas about how to approach this. Don't feel like what you post has to be a final drat, either. I am more than willing to provide feedback on a first draft.

I can't wait to see what you come up with!
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Re: CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« Reply #2 on: 2016-07-15 23:00:48 »
This sounds like a great idea, and I'd love to be a part of it! I've got a few ideas already.


As a forward to my actual story ideas, allow me to explain my thought processes a little. Keeping in mind our very limited length (2-5 minutes) most of my ideas sacrifice backstory for brevity, and character depth is cut for immediate character relatability. In its place, I've tried to put more emphasis on story-telling and visuals; allowing characters to be moved along by events, even if they do not initialize them.
Also, admittedly I have very little experience in the field of animation, especially regarding as to what constitutes a "difficult to create" scene. So my ideas will be guided by ignorance until told otherwise.

Plot 1:
A young girl sits in her room, homework spread out on her bed (or desk). Momentary emphasis is shown on the grimy smoggy city outside her window. Sighing in boredom, she begins tossing a ball or similar object at the wall. After a particularly angled toss, it bounces away from her and at her large mirror. The ball goes through the mirror, rippling its surface like water. Surprised and curious, she goes to investigate and after some trepidation, passes through. On the other side is a beautiful fairy-tale-esque forest. Sunlight filters through the canopy, highlighting beautiful flowers. Small fantasy creatures (bunnies made from sticks, cat sized lavender elephants, etc.) move about unafraid as she joyously wanders about this new world. She comes upon an immensely large tree in a clearing, laden with fruit. She reaches up and picks one. Non-diegetic music abruptly cuts off, as the lighting goes harsh and sparse. Everything becomes antagonistic, attacking her directly or merely hampering her progress as she runs back to the portal. Every shadow has eyes, the animals from before are snarling beasts, and her terror is made apparent by a soundtrack with a strong drum beat. Breaking away in a burst of speed she leaps through the portal back into her room. She lies there briefly, as traffic is heard in the distance. The next shot zooms out from her mirror, residing against the garbage can outside her house.

Plot 2:
A young girl walks down a nondescript street. Her uniform and the orange setting sun indicate that she is walking home from school. A boy comes up from behind her fast on his bike, causing her to nearly fall over, though she (in slow motion) does manage to glimpse his attractive face. As he rides off, something important (phone, journal, key ring, etc.) falls from his pocket/basket/person. She picks it up and calls out, but he's too far off. She takes off running after him, but can never quite catch him. Trying to save time, she cuts corners, takes alleyways, even runs through people's stores and houses, occasionally vaulting over or sliding under obstacles. Eventually she ends up in front of him, where they do collide. On the ground, nursing minor bruises, they look up and pause as they meet each other’s eyes. She lifts up his lost object and presents it to him. He takes it and smiles, and she smiles back. Scene either ends there or with them walking away together.



Plot 1 Critique:
The main issue with this idea is artistic scale. While this story reduces the effort needed in voice-acting, it is very art-heavy and would need more detailed backgrounds to better capture the scenes. While not impossible, it would still be a considerable effort. However, the idea is very flexible. If timber bunnies are too difficult to animate, they can easily be replaced with crystal turtles, or glowing balls of light or practically anything else in the fantasy genre to fill space.


Plot 2 Critique:
This, much like the prior story, depends more on artistic scale than storyline. While this idea replaces difficult artistic elements (fantasy woods, magical animals, and hidden glades) with simpler ones (houses, shops, and streets) it does need more complicated animations in order to portray action properly as the girl runs, jumps, and slides her way across town. Again, time and cost are saved by reduced voice acting. The story itself is also very simplistic: girl chases after cute boy to return his item. However I think this may prove a benefit. As an initial venture, we don't want to push for anything too extravagant or complicated.


I am very excited for this project, and will likely come up with more ideas in the coming days/weeks. Better to have too many ideas than too few, right?

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Re: CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« Reply #3 on: 2016-07-17 13:57:29 »
Quote from: BroadwayPrism
As a forward to my actual story ideas, allow me to explain my thought processes a little. Keeping in mind our very limited length (2-5 minutes) most of my ideas sacrifice backstory for brevity, and character depth is cut for immediate character relatability. In its place, I've tried to put more emphasis on story-telling and visuals; allowing characters to be moved along by events, even if they do not initialize them.
Also, admittedly I have very little experience in the field of animation, especially regarding as to what constitutes a "difficult to create" scene. So my ideas will be guided by ignorance until told otherwise.

Thanks so much for submitting your story ideas! I completely agree with your assessment of the storytelling limitations, and think that both of your proposals do this well--much better than the example I came up with. Since my knowledge of animation is far greater than my sills at writing, I may ask others to jump in with story-related feedback and just lay out the animation challenges I see with each proposal. This isn't to discourage you, but to simply make you aware of them should you choose to revise either of these proposals further. Goodness knows whichever project we end up doing, there will be plenty of animation challenges--I'm just trying to keep them to a minimum if I can help it.

Quote from: BroadwayPrism
Plot 1:
A young girl sits in her room, homework spread out on her bed (or desk). Momentary emphasis is shown on the grimy smoggy city outside her window. Sighing in boredom, she begins tossing a ball or similar object at the wall. After a particularly angled toss, it bounces away from her and at her large mirror. The ball goes through the mirror, rippling its surface like water. Surprised and curious, she goes to investigate and after some trepidation, passes through. On the other side is a beautiful fairy-tale-esque forest. Sunlight filters through the canopy, highlighting beautiful flowers. Small fantasy creatures (bunnies made from sticks, cat sized lavender elephants, etc.) move about unafraid as she joyously wanders about this new world. She comes upon an immensely large tree in a clearing, laden with fruit. She reaches up and picks one. Non-diegetic music abruptly cuts off, as the lighting goes harsh and sparse. Everything becomes antagonistic, attacking her directly or merely hampering her progress as she runs back to the portal. Every shadow has eyes, the animals from before are snarling beasts, and her terror is made apparent by a soundtrack with a strong drum beat. Breaking away in a burst of speed she leaps through the portal back into her room. She lies there briefly, as traffic is heard in the distance. The next shot zooms out from her mirror, residing against the garbage can outside her house.

This proposal interests me a lot because it provides an opportunity to incorporate multiple different art styles. I'll admit, though, that I don't know much about doing more abstract styles of animation, which might be the most effective style for the fantasy sequence: I think it will probably come down to individual artists and their skills, like if someone can sketch in a really dynamic way, or if someone else is really good at painting. I think as long as the fantasy sequence is kept somewhat stylized, however, there shouldn't be too many other problems. Certainly, animating a room with one character shouldn't be too difficult, although if we end up developing this idea further, I'd like to choreograph the bouncing ball bit, as I'm having trouble picturing quite how you imagined it.

I haven't mentioned anything about this yet, but I think music and sound design matter a lot in this kind of production, and since this piece may end up being entirely devoid of dialog, it will be all the more important to have good music that matches the tone of the story. If you imagined any particular type of music accompanying this, or your other proposal, that would be well worth including in any future revisions.

Quote from: BroadwayPrism
Plot 2:
A young girl walks down a nondescript street. Her uniform and the orange setting sun indicate that she is walking home from school. A boy comes up from behind her fast on his bike, causing her to nearly fall over, though she (in slow motion) does manage to glimpse his attractive face. As he rides off, something important (phone, journal, key ring, etc.) falls from his pocket/basket/person. She picks it up and calls out, but he's too far off. She takes off running after him, but can never quite catch him. Trying to save time, she cuts corners, takes alleyways, even runs through people's stores and houses, occasionally vaulting over or sliding under obstacles. Eventually she ends up in front of him, where they do collide. On the ground, nursing minor bruises, they look up and pause as they meet each other’s eyes. She lifts up his lost object and presents it to him. He takes it and smiles, and she smiles back. Scene either ends there or with them walking away together.

This proposal is nice because it "feels" a lot like an anime, perhaps because it reminds me of the short film Fumiko's Confession. It does, however, have numerous animation hurdles that may prove insurmountable, unless we can come up with some clever work-arounds. The first thing that rang warning bells in my mind was the bicycle the boy is riding. Bicycles are notoriously difficult to animate, even for seasoned veterans, and unlike cars, CGI substitutes are virtually impossible to implement well. With careful framing, these challenges could be curbed somewhat, but almost every chromatography decision would have to be balanced with the difficulty of animating the bicycle from that angle.

As I said, tough, every project will have its own set of challenges: this could be this projects challenge, and overcoming it would give our animators and artists lots of valuable experience. I certainly can't see a way to remove the bicycle from the narrative, as it is integral to the "chase" element of the story. That chase sequence, however, will present its own array of challenges too. I think these will be more-manageable, though, as there is some flexibility in what scenes we would include, and good sound design may be able to pick up the slack. I'd want to work with you on this, should this make it to the storyboarding stage, again, in order to minimize the challenges our animators will face.

Again, I'll try to have someone leave some actual writing feedback for you soon. I like both of these proposals, though, and I'm interested in seeing how they develop. Thanks again for contributing!
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Re: CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« Reply #4 on: 2016-07-22 00:41:56 »
I'd like to choreograph the bouncing ball bit, as I'm having trouble picturing quite how you imagined it.
Probably similar to the ball bouncing bit in this clip from The Simpsons (minus the ball bouncing back into her face, of course).

These seem like good ideas.  Most of my story ideas are really long and would be tough to edit down to a reasonable length while keeping it coherent.  I do have one thing, though, that is kind of standalone.  I'd intended to go on further writing it, but never found inspiration beyond a bulleted list of plot points and things I wanted to appear later on.  It's intended to have kind of a weird mix of sci-fi and mysticism.  I'll summarize here, and post links to the full thing for anyone who's interested.

Essentially, it's about two colonists on a planet that's mostly covered in jungle who happen upon a strange desolate area while out exploring the jungle.  In this desolate area, they come across a large structure that seems to be covered in sand, with no obvious way inside.  Later, in the evening, they happen upon a village where the locals (tribal people) seem to be performing some sort of ritual with dancing and chanting around a bonfire.  In the middle of the village, they see a girl who definitely doesn't belong there, as her clothing doesn't match what the tribe is wearing.  After the ritual ends and the tribe goes to sleep, they sneak into the village and rescue the girl, who reveals she's been there for about a year (backstory omitted lol).  She also grabs a gnarled wooden staff from the village before they leave, with a clouded glass orb held to one end by vines.  She reveals that the reason the tribe kept her alive was because she could make this staff do things.  On their way back, they go past the sand-covered building and decide to use the staff to blow the sand off of it.  As the exterior of the building is uncovered, a door is revealed.  They have a short conversation with the guy who lives inside the building.  Lots of intended backstory here, but he made the staff and was exiled from the village shortly after having made it.  He entrusts them with the staff, and they leave and go back to their colony with the girl.

Original story (writing may or may not be terrible)

bulleted list of additional plot points and whatnot (would be useful for character designs, setting scenes, and so forth)

Dunno how feasible it'd be, but... there it is.  It'd be a bit less difficult sci-fi wise since the colonists have already settled on the planet, so nothing zero-g to worry about.  I could imagine the fire and the effects for the staff being difficult, though.  As for length, my stuff tends to go on for a while, but as I previously said this one could be edited down.
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Re: CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« Reply #5 on: 2016-08-20 19:09:06 »
Since we're running out of time, I might as well toss in my other half-baked idea as well. Admittedly, I haven't thought this one through as thoroughly as the previous ones, but I think it may be an interesting idea that we could expand it to something interesting. The general idea is that it's one day in the life of a completely ordinary girl. She wakes up, goes to school, chats with her friends, maybe goes to karaoke or something, goes home and falls asleep. The twist, is that in the background big anime-type things are going on that she takes no notice of because they're just so commonplace. A giant mech battles a robot across town as she walks to school, a kid with vibrantly colored hair makes a fool of himself in the back corner window seat of her class, multiple people challenge each other for someone's affection in the cafeteria, or other similar overdone tropes. And she just is unfazed by it all. Raining frogs outside? She sighs and opens her umbrella. Scantily clad magical girls duking it out downtown? She calmly recommends her friends go to the karaoke bar across town instead. In the end, she goes to sleep (maybe with some comment about how boring everything is).

There are so many common tropes that almost any scene can be swapped out for another one if we encounter production difficulties. This gives us a lot of fluidity and options, and I personally think this is something we could have a lot of fun with. Plus, if we do it well enough, people might call it an "artistic meta-commentary of the lack of originality in modern anime", and even if they don't, the contrast between the situations and her reactions should be a pleasant source of comedy.

(Bonus idea: If we feel cheeky enough we could include familiar-looking (but still different enough to be technically original) characters in the background such as "One Kick Girl" or "Spirit Consumer" or "Stain Remover". Just a thought. The idea itself still could stand without this bit.)

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Re: CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« Reply #6 on: 2016-08-21 21:52:57 »
It's a bit late, but here's my proposal:

The story opens to the clashing of sword against sword. Two individuals stand off against each other in a clearing, their ragged breaths coming out in puff after puff of white fog in the cold noon air. Once, twice more they clash, before the sword goes flying out of the numb hands of one, a short girl whose eyes are as dark a grey as the poor fitting armor she wears. Chagrined, a few frustrated tears freezing on her cheeks, she awaits the fall of the final blow. A brief pause as the other person catches their breath, allowing themselves a brief moment of surprise at their victory, before turning grim, eyes angry and hateful, and moving forward. As their footfalls crunch on snow, the victor's shadow slowly moves over the loser, who digs her fingers into the ground to keep from running, as she knows it would be futile. Yet, to her surprise, the victor moves past her, and then she feels a weight against her back. Sitting there, back to back, the silence is broken by the sounds of two people sighing with relief and exhaustion, the anger and hatred between them draining away. Snow falls on the two of them, as they lean against each other for support. End with a fade to white.

I know it's a bit more serious (and complicated, and tropey) than some of the other suggestions, but I would like to know what everyone thinks.

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Re: CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« Reply #7 on: 2016-08-21 23:59:27 »
I'm really waiting until the last minute here to post some ideas, but here it goes. Most of the ideas I have had for animes have been far too long and complicated to attempt, outside of any plot concerns.

(Mainly massive war epics set in the near or later future featuring the dintegration of the US in civil war or the world plunging into the abyss as modern civilization comes crashing down in the midst of a cataclysmic worldwide conventional war.  Also, another idea would be following a group of protagonists in a war and it slowly is revealed to the viewer that they are actually a bunch of evil SOBs whose attrocities make those of the "enemy" appear tame in comparison; the goal being that the viewer would be cheering when the "heroes and heroines" finally met their violent and horrific deaths.   The other main idea would be about a she-demon rebelling against the forces of hell and only knowing about the human world through manga and anime (revealed to be a demonic plot to corrupt the youth of Japan (this would not be a serious drama)).  She would decide to fight against the forces of (greater) Evil by conscripting a bunch of young women and forcibly turning them into magical "girls", with their reactions being played completely straight.  Also, there would be no "anime physics;" they would be getting involved in knock-down, drag out fight with demons using guns, knives, swords, brass nuckles, or whatever iron bars or wooden planks they find laying around.

Anyway, I will have to create another thread in order to expand on those ideas and let others post their ideas for all the animes they wish could be made if they had unlimited budget and influence.)

Now for my ideas for shorts which we might be able to actually create ourselves:

Idea # 1
This is along somewhat similar lines to Broadway's idea,  I had been thinking up a satirical and comedic sketch poking fun at all of the common character archetypes, and why if one thinks about it, they would most likely greatly prefer to live in the real world over any of the ones portrayed in manga or anime.

My idea is that two college students, a guy and a girl, are looking through some manga in the CAINE room and one of them comments on how they wish they could live in the type of world portrayed in whatever manga they are reading at the time or whatever anime they are watching. As soon as he or she utters these words, a voice saying " Well then it's your lucky day" or something along those lines and a stereotypical looking, although also vaguely demonic looking (maybe slightly pointed ears and a cute fang or two) frilly magical girl climbs out of a portal in a manga laying on the ground and tells them that she can grant their wish and send them to any type of anime world they want as any type of character.  The guy and girl seem pretty freaked out and the "magical girl" tries to reassure them by saying that "Its not like I'm an evil demon whose going steal your souls and trap you in an ironic hell of your own creation! ;D" She would then turn towards the viewer, breaking the fourth wall, and smile showing a mouth full of razor sharp teeth and buring red eyes, and then wink.
She would then say she can turn them into the full range of "deres", poofing herself into a classic example of each one, ending as a yandere with pink hair and mimicking the Yuno the Yandere Queen pose Meme. 
She could then turn to the guy and girl and start poofing them into a series of character tropes, such as lone medieval hero, super powered muscleman (similar to Dragon Ball Z),  pretty boy member of a reverse-harem, or "edgy" chunibiyo for the guy, and then a magical girl, shy schoolgirl, genki girl, '80s style action girl, or a super hot, scantily clad "waifu", the last of which results in both the guy and magical girl staring at her exitedly with nosebleeds, at which the furious girl whacks them both on the head with a chair or something until she's poofed back to normal.  The magical girl then tells them to make a decision, and the guy and girl talk about it, before the girl asks if they can ever change back, and the magical girl says something like "Of course not! If I let you do that, it wouldn't be much of a faustian bargain, now would it-oh shit! I mean, oh, nevermind, now I'm just going to rip out your souls!!!!" She unveils her full demonic form, and laughing maniacly, lunges at them.  The girl holds up the open manga and the she-demon (formerly magical girl) flies into it, unable to stop and going back through the portal from whence she came.  The girl slams the manga shut, and then she and the guy duck tape it up, and agree to never speak of it or ever wish to live in an anime world ever again.

Self-critique: It seems like this could be difficult to animate, with all of the different costume designs, and also because of the heavy usemof dialogue.  Also, i don't know how comedic others would find it, and it may be aimed at too limited an audience, appealing mainly to those already big fans of maga and anime.  The characters would stay in the same setting though.

Idea #2
This one would focus on a lone soldier of a defeated army walking along a deserted road amidst a ruined landscape, filled with brown fields, sharred towns and the carnage of war.  This would include him walking past blown up tanks, scrashed jets, and in one seen, a seemingly endless plain of grave stones, displaying his country's complete and utter defeat.  As he walks, dressed in a tattered uniform and holding an AK-47, he abandons various items, as he is using up the last of his strength on this journey.  Various items, such as his helmet, utility belt, and even rucksack form a line behind him as he trudges on in the distance, a lone figure amidst the desolation. One shot could focus in on a small case he dropped containing several medals, including ones modeled on the Purple Heart and Medal of Honor, implying that this man had been decorated for extreme valor during the war.  The camera focusses in on the man, showing that the only two things he carries are his Kalashnikov (AK-47) and a photo.  The camera focusses in on the photo, showing a woman holding a baby, and there is a flashback as the man, in a previous time before the war reduced him to a hollow shell of himself, playing with his young daughter in the yard outside of a small house, as his smiling wife looked on.  Immediately, there is a cut to a shot of the kalashnikoc clattering to the ground.  The man sinks to the ground, sobbing on his hands and knees, as the camera pans up to show the burned out ruins of the house from the flashback, with two hastily dug graves with crosses made from wooden slats in the front yard, one grave adult sized, and the other the other child sized.  The final shot is the man on his knees, using the Kalashnikov as a crutch to lean on as he sobs in anguish, siloletted by the twighlight against the ruins and graves, the last thing he had left to live for gone. Fade to black.

Self-critique: I don't know if we want to make something this sad and depressing.

Idea #3
This one would show several men and women in military uniforms, the location shots showing they are in Japan and the date given as some time in the future, such as 2120 or so.  They are high ranking military leaders and are discussing how they will mee the seemingly inevitable Russian military onslaught, which had turned east after accomplishing its centuries old goal of conquering continental Europe.  They discuss possibilities of allies, before one of them suggests they ask for help from the Americans, as in the inhabitants of the American Republic, the sucessor to the Unted States, now an isolated place inhabited by people who resmble central asians in appearence after the almost total triumph of the ethnic melting pot.  After a century of warfare, they are looked as akin to the Huns of the 400s AD.  The military leaders react to this suggestion and meet with some of the americans.










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Re: CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« Reply #8 on: 2016-08-22 00:00:17 »
this one time, at band camp, it really was the last minute!
Also, for the last idea, I meant that they are considered by the rest of the world as the modern equivalent of the Huns, and it is seemingly an act of terrifying desperation to seek an alliance with them.  The idea would be to show some of the cultural changes in Japan and the US in a somewhat dystopian future with relatively similar technology to now, only with a smaller world population and a dramatically different geopolitical situation.  hard to do in under five minutes though.
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Re: CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« Reply #9 on: 2016-08-22 23:26:26 »
Hi!  My name is Stephen Dwyer - I know Leo and a few members, I've been to some meetings and am a rather avid fan of anime!

I'm also a HUGE fan of animation, whether American or Japanese.  Before seeing this, I had already (back in June) started making a longer animated pilot episode.  I'm working on that now and am learning a lot about the process of animation; ie, programs to use, how to dub (or even dub in  Japanese in sub, if you all wanted to do that), compositing for something, etc. etc. etc.

In addition, I'm also the President of the Filmmaker's Society and an employee on the third floor at Clemons (the media center) and have access to listservs for possible voice actors and actresses (if you all wanted to go that route, as opposed to using CAINE members, which is probably must more fun!) and more importantly, composers, sound designers, and audio recording equipment.

I think this is an amazing project!  I don't want to impose too much, especially since I have not been terribly active in CAINE, but I would like to offer my assistance in any way that I can and at least be there to see how your project comes along.  It's so exciting seeing this all happen, I'd love to help!

I don't have too much of a pitch, but since this is a call for ideas, here's a short one that I've written some screenplay for a while back that I never really got to trying to animate.  It's just an idea, I totally would not be offended if y'all don't really like it.

It would be called "_____ and ____'s ridiculous adventures behind the stove underneath their apartment in the gate too... well you don't know what the gate is until you watch this show, actually the name of the show is just THE RIDICULOUS ADVENTURES" <--- IE that whole thing is the name.  It's suppose to be a comedy adventure about two college students who think they hear mice in the walls in their kitchen, so they move the stove and there is a huge HOLE in the wall behind it (this actually happened to my roommate and I help).  Suddenly, a chubacabra jumps out and they try to catch it, but it gets it head stuck in an empty jar of peanut butter and it runs back in the hole.  They decide they should help it, since it's head it stuck, and they follow it into the hold, behind the stove, underneath their apartment, in the gate too.... yes, the UNDERWORLD!  And there are just a bunch of fun crazy characters, like a Minotaur with a low self image who just wants to be a fashion designer, or a three headed cerberus who just wants to play fetch, or a devil who gets offended by anything and everything- I mean these are just ideas, we could really do whatever we wanted with this world.  It might be too long of an idea for a two to five minute short, but I wanted to throw it out there!

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Re: CAINE Makes an Anime: Screenplay Proposals
« Reply #10 on: 2016-08-23 08:44:07 »
Notice: Submissions are no longer being accepted. Thank you all for sharing your ideas! More information coming soon.